You did a great job "mashing" up the different elements that made up this story! I'm impressed. Your character voicing was well-done too ;). I liked that you changed the visuals and audios, yet kept the story moving along and connected. I think that you could put in a slightly more clear "conclusion," (the unconclusion) because you had a pattern going w/narration/text, and then dropped the pattern. As much as I do love my president, I was just slightly confused (I have a short attn span at times) because it had been just about racial equality and then went into broader equality. So I loved the clip that you chose, but then you broke your narration pattern. As an "audience," I wanted the narrator to point out the obvious - it wouldn't be too trite, in my opinion... Great job! :)
Dang, go to sleep already:) Thanks for your feedback, I didn't want to get too preachy. How were you confused? I was going for kind of an unconclusion and there being a new type of inequality to fight for. What exactly do you want the narrator to point out? Thanks, Josh.
All right Josh! This is pretty cool. I like that you made this into a documentary styled video, and I agree that you do a great job at narrating the video. Very good job, and I think the first time this semester I managed to make a shorter video than you. Nice work, and enjoy your summer.
I was wondering how were going to pull it off. Good job letting the pieces you mashed up tell the story. Love the cricket! I do agree with Kerry a little bit--wanted to hear from you or TJ or cricket again. Perhaps a bit of reflection? But then ,yes, you would have had to get "messagey" there.
You did a great job "mashing" up the different elements that made up this story! I'm impressed. Your character voicing was well-done too ;). I liked that you changed the visuals and audios, yet kept the story moving along and connected. I think that you could put in a slightly more clear "conclusion," (the unconclusion) because you had a pattern going w/narration/text, and then dropped the pattern. As much as I do love my president, I was just slightly confused (I have a short attn span at times) because it had been just about racial equality and then went into broader equality. So I loved the clip that you chose, but then you broke your narration pattern. As an "audience," I wanted the narrator to point out the obvious - it wouldn't be too trite, in my opinion... Great job! :)
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DeleteThanks for your feedback, I didn't want to get too preachy. How were you confused? I was going for kind of an unconclusion and there being a new type of inequality to fight for. What exactly do you want the narrator to point out? Thanks, Josh.
All right Josh! This is pretty cool. I like that you made this into a documentary styled video, and I agree that you do a great job at narrating the video. Very good job, and I think the first time this semester I managed to make a shorter video than you. Nice work, and enjoy your summer.
ReplyDeleteI was wondering how were going to pull it off. Good job letting the pieces you mashed up tell the story. Love the cricket! I do agree with Kerry a little bit--wanted to hear from you or TJ or cricket again. Perhaps a bit of reflection? But then ,yes, you would have had to get "messagey" there.
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